Comments : He Saved Me

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    On the last line.
    You spelled met wrong.
    You spelled it like meght
    Or something like that.
    But otherwise.
    It's pretty good.
    The format's not gorgous.
    But I'll give it a 4 :]

  • 17 years ago

    by Alex

    Good poem. Sad too.

    You spelled legs wrong too.

  • 17 years ago

    by Faded

    I thought it was a good poem overall, maybe the flow seemed a little different than others that ive read, but either way the message was clear and easy to understand. great work

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    I liked this poem. I could almost tell it wasn't about you because the feelings weren't as strong as your other poems, but they were explanitory. Great Job. <3

  • It was very self eplanitory, the flow was a little better, I think you should take the "Myself" off of the end of this stanza..

    "But then someone got there before me.
    A boy at school killed him self.
    I cried but not for him but because
    he killed him self before I could kill myself. <<
    God I am so ****** up it's not funny."

    lol, it wouldn't let me copy and paste this into this comment, inappropriate words.. lol Anyhow, chance that part to..

    "He killed himself, before I could,"

    Or something like that, the myself, myself, in the same line, because redundeant. Making is kinda of a tongue twister, lol. You're a great writer, and have alot of potential, so please don't take offence to what I am saying. Please, keep posting.
    -Ally

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    O.k you misspelled a few things. But all in all the message you were sending out was amazing. I can relate to your friend. Well written. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a really good poem. It is good to know, when you are really down, to know that someone is there to help you. Great poem. 5/5

    Kalee