First of all I think it would be better if you put it in stanza's.
But other than that it was good.
It flowed well and the emotion was shown.
Keep it up 4/5

[Sarah]

It feels a little bit out of balance.
I like it, the story you put into it
I like it
But the flow seems kind of rocky.
Other than that
It's pretty good
4/5?

Pretty good but i think u have to check out what makes me distract to ur poems onyl u have to put stanza's but though still nice work.. coz most important for me is the message and the flow.. so nice job

Pretty good but i think u have to check out what makes me distract to ur poems onyl u have to put stanza's but though still nice work.. coz most important for me is the message and the flow.. so nice job

Its ok, Ive read alot better, and I agree seperate them into stanzas it would make the structure easier to follow.
I can relate so it kinda hit home as alot of poems do. keep it up :)

It was good :) But i think you may be able to do alot better if you put your heart into it. Keep it up. Xx Chrissie