Lol...alex..great write..it did'nt look all tht "copied";-)..lol..i liked the repetition..it gave this peice a good effect..different though..since u tried out sumthing new and it did turn out well..i give u a 5/5...
Xx Pooja xX
Well done. Very, very well done. If only this hadn't been from a song but from your heart, I think the emotional power would be stronger and it would be that much more easy to relate to. I thought it was lovely. Stanzas would be lovely and more visually appealing to the eye just as an fyi. I noticed a lot of your poems are like this. Well done. 5/5
The repeation was amazingly well placed, and even though a song gave you your insperation, you can tell its from the heart as well. it was really kind of sad at least thats how I interperted it, the poem was a little hard to follow in some places, but the emtion made up for that, all in all I would have to say you did an excellent job. 5/5