This is such a great poem, specially the comparasion between the two, you are truly an amazing writer. keep it up like always.

Not my favorite, but it was still amazing. I just love the way you have with words; simply amazing. Great description, as well.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Well the word choice was definalty vey well chosen, excellent vocab, you have in this poem. the flow was good, but in some places it is alittle rocky, but the story takes away from that, the com[arsion was diffrent, and that is indeed a plus in my book, the emtion was strong, and I think this deserves nothing less than 5/5. Well written once again.

Excellent poem, I really enjoyed it, keep up the good work. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

I loved this work...it's soo beautiful n the word choice excellent...great vocab!!...
kp up the good work!

5/5!=)
xxPoojaxx

I like your usage of rhyme couplets in your poetry The title of the poem and the introduction line made me ownder wehat the poem was baout. The disk and the eye? i wondered what you meant by this. The poem had a good flow but once more i thought your structure could of been improved. I can kinda see what your saying with this poem. And i like this reference you have going on about Egypt. "Little By little" this creates this image of it slowly happeneing. A good read. Really intresting. But to improve this i suggest you use punctuation and work on the structure. Keep writing! xx

This was really well done.. the word choice you use in all of your writing is excellent, you have a great way with words, really do.

It was a little long for a poem in my opinion, but I still loved it.. The rhyme was almost perfect too.

For some reason, I really liked this phrase...

"In Battles of lost lands The Eye did everything that had to be done,"

Not sure why that one specific, but I did. lol..
Ignore my ignorance..

In any case, you are really a great writer in my opinion, so please keep posting, thanks for sharing with everyone.

I give this a 5/5 don't know how anyone could give you anything less.

Take care and have a nice day.

~Ally~

This is I would say rather a unique poem because the wordings and the metaphors in this piece are different. Different is always good and it reflects your creativity. 5/5 piece

5/5 for sure. The flow was good, the story line, even better. I think this puts you on my fave list. I'm expecting a lot of good reads from you. :)

Lol im not sure that i actually undersatnd this poem, but i like it. its well written and very different to what i normally read. well done.