Comments : Dont let go

  • 11 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    I like how you repeated Dont Let Go before every line. The flow of it was good and it had great rhythm. But I found a couple of lines that I thought you might of missed a word or missplaced it:

    "watching you walk away is a like bullet to the heart"

    I think you meant to say, watching you walk away is like a bullet to the heart, you put the 'a' before like.

    "and now hand hand to we are together"

    On this I think you meant to say 'hand in hand' and take off the word 'to'. Other than those I didnt find anything wrong with it. Well done!

  • 10 years ago

    by Roxy

    The last stanza truly touched me =] I was amazing Im going to say it to my loved one =P Lol!! Nah ^^ I'd like to though lol. It's how I feel right now maybe thats why I love this poem so much =] Its really special to have someone who cares about you and its so hard when they fade away more each day... Anyway Wonderfull write =] keep up the amazing work I admire this poem ^^ Favorited xxxx 5/5 Love Roxy