Comments : Just one more

  • 11 years ago

    by Fsams

    Very interesting life poem. I like the word choice and the cohesion is there in this piece. Poetic and lexically strong. 5/5 all the way

    In the line "And less comfort that we please." that should be than :)

    tc
    Fsams

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I like this, a lot. Once again, there were a few things that seemed a little off to me, but overall, I really enjoyed reading this. I usually extremely dislike questions as an ending line, but I must admit, this one did quite well where it is. Great job.

    5.5
    :]