I think this is a wonderful write, full of expression, emotion, and truth. There were a few spelling errors and grammatical things, such as "there"
needing to be "their", "are" needing to be "our" etc. But over all a pretty fluid, thoughtful outpour.
Just amazing, how u equal everybody in this poem. You must be very intellegent. Thinking out loud, really loved it all, thinking about life itself and how it really is. A great idea. Nice chose of words. Really meaningful.
I loved this thought : things tend to only last a short while, it's so true, life always changeing so fast and so on.
Really enjoyed this piece!