Comments : One Shot.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    WOW! This is so short and yet so very powerful. Being a victem off domestic violence makes this piece scream out to me.

    In a way it is as though I just relived the ten years of abuse and I am left shaking all over again.

    When someone can write something that takes a person literally into their past then you know that it is written extremely well.

    I cannot say that I like this piece because of the memories that suddenly haunt me all over again, but I can say that you have done an outstanding job!


  • 11 years ago

    by Brittney

    This poem is amazing! The detail and imagery in it is outstanding. Almost like the reader(me) were there watching the whole thing, if that makes any sense to you. Either way this is a very powerful poem. Keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Michelle18

    WOW...this was very intense.. the violence and anger made me focus on the poem completely..

    great flow and just a wonderful job on this one.5/5

  • 11 years ago


    Hey i really love this poem
    wery , very deep
    i would not call this this sweet but its very poewerful

  • 11 years ago

    by chris

    I loved the end, the beggining didn't make much sense to me at first til I got there but overall you created a very fine piece! keep up the good work 4/5

  • 11 years ago


    I liked it, but I felt like the lines could have had a little more description in them to help the reader full see what is going on. The imagery was great and did help me, but a little more description would make it better so that the end isn`t just thrown in there and so sudden.

    But, the imagery, wording and flow were all very good.