Great poem though the flow at the end threw me off a bit. Other than that I thought it was a great piece of work, it almost feels like there should be more to it.

Very dark, very emotional piece...very vivid image shines through your words, great work on this, keep it up

I love the abcb,dece rhyming it is really uniquie (SP) it sounds like a really difficult scheme. Great jod:~)Sam

Such a sad poem....very deep and heartfelt...it pours with emotion...awesome work!

Your flow was on in this one until I hit the last 2 stanzas. It goes better if you take "the" out of the last line of the 4th stanza and for me the last line of the last stanza has too many syllables. Otherwise I like the poem and the dark feeling behind it, you did a nice job. Good work.