Really like the thoughts this had made me think, about life and what im doing with it. not sure if that was your point but yeah. love how as soon as read the first bit i felt dark, not just like this poem is dark but it made me feel dark. i think this is well written and flows well. :)
Wow... Like this really is an amazing piece. It had so many beautiful metaphors. Struggleling through life,but it gave a lot of inspiration to live on. Makes think about life itself.
I just loved:
"Life will live on as an art, life will live on forever,
Take the puzzle apart, just to put it back together"
Now this poem absolutely took my breathe away. It was so deep. The imagery is so good and the flow fit just right. I think this is my favorite out of all your poems. Very good job. Don't ever stop writing!
This was amazing. And I really liked it. I like the idea of the poem too. :] This was unique and very interesting. The flow was amazing And the beginning really got my attention, and held. :] An enjoyable read. 5/5.
Mental addictions that we must resist,
Earthy pleasures that are here to distract us,
Nothing but eternity above would be so righteous,
Time will only tell, if we are all going to hell,
-like this line the most,
the whole poem was written so well, very well!