Very effective with unique atmosphere and excellently expressed thoughts and emotions. I can relate to some pats of this piece.
My favorite lines are:

-We live in a cruel place
where pain and pleasure mix.
We dream in mesh and lace
and live to get our fix.-
^Great descriptions
Keep up!
5/5 from me

I like it alot, but the second stanza's flow is a bit off. The first though, is great.

I really like this...A LOT! it was very...unique...and it was intresting...the descriptions you used...wow...amazing hun. you got a very powerful talent that pours out your emotions! Wonderful. Keep it up!

This is going on my favorites.
My jaw dropped at the lines:
'The dead go on living
and the living want to die.'

I put you on my favorites about two years ago, and now I see why. Were you in a clun with me or something?