Comments : Till Truth Becomes a Lie

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very effective with unique atmosphere and excellently expressed thoughts and emotions. I can relate to some pats of this piece.
    My favorite lines are:

    -We live in a cruel place
    where pain and pleasure mix.
    We dream in mesh and lace
    and live to get our fix.-
    ^Great descriptions
    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

  • I like it alot, but the second stanza's flow is a bit off. The first though, is great.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenna

    I really like this...A LOT! it was very...unique...and it was intresting...the descriptions you hun. you got a very powerful talent that pours out your emotions! Wonderful. Keep it up!

  • 10 years ago

    by Tina Carr AKA Snickers

    This is going on my favorites.
    My jaw dropped at the lines:
    'The dead go on living
    and the living want to die.'

    I put you on my favorites about two years ago, and now I see why. Were you in a clun with me or something?