Comments : Behind Closed Minds (free Verse)

  • 10 years ago

    by Deana

    The message in this really struck me, how true!
    It seems like people just can`t find the beauty in things anymore. maybe we just stopped looking,very sad. wonderful write!

  • 10 years ago

    by Timothy r

    To help get hs rainbow off the ground...these words hit me, I think alot of us want just that...the poem was sad, but also great from word 1. Timothy r

  • 10 years ago

    by Nic

    I love this poem keep up the great work

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, wow...
    I am honestly impressed with this piece, completely speechless.
    Well...
    First, the topic that you wrote about is excellent and important and I can't agree more with the message that you greatly pointed out here.
    This is truly superb free-verse, with flawless flow and great choice of words.
    I liked the ending, because it is so positive and I found so much hope in it. It truly made me smile and feel better.
    I have to say that you should be proud on this piece.
    This is my favorite poem from you by now, and I'm adding it to my favorite poems list.
    You kept my attention from the beginning to the end and I wasn't disappointed by any part of this amazing piece.
    My favorite lines are;

    -And while their eyes are glued on the gray
    They miss the little leprechaun
    Calling for back up
    To help get his rainbow off the ground.
    These are the walking-numb,
    Oblivious to the sun's glowing rays,
    Hyper-conscious of the shadows,
    That lurk 'round the corners. -
    ^
    Greatly worded, with so vivid imagery.
    Keep writing!
    5/5 from me

  • 10 years ago

    by Fan Angeleo

    So real and the Leprechaun adds a nice touch. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Empty Space

    I like to read free verse poems because it allows the author to just pour out emotions and not having to maintain the basics, four lines, space, four lines, space, if you know what I mean. Free verse are the true nature of poems in my opinion because it makes it all about the emotions and that's important. this poem illustrates this, it's wonderful!:)

  • 9 years ago

    by Patience

    Not only is this a poem about life, it is also inspirational. The importance of this message is so strong, yet, I think we all are a little guilty of forgetting to stop and smell the flowers at times. As a reader, it kept me drawn in from beginning to end and also kept my mind thinking about the message after. Beautifully written!