I am honestly impressed with this piece, completely speechless.
First, the topic that you wrote about is excellent and important and I can't agree more with the message that you greatly pointed out here.
This is truly superb free-verse, with flawless flow and great choice of words.
I liked the ending, because it is so positive and I found so much hope in it. It truly made me smile and feel better.
I have to say that you should be proud on this piece.
This is my favorite poem from you by now, and I'm adding it to my favorite poems list.
You kept my attention from the beginning to the end and I wasn't disappointed by any part of this amazing piece.
My favorite lines are;
-And while their eyes are glued on the gray
They miss the little leprechaun
Calling for back up
To help get his rainbow off the ground.
These are the walking-numb,
Oblivious to the sun's glowing rays,
Hyper-conscious of the shadows,
That lurk 'round the corners. -
Greatly worded, with so vivid imagery.
5/5 from me
I like to read free verse poems because it allows the author to just pour out emotions and not having to maintain the basics, four lines, space, four lines, space, if you know what I mean. Free verse are the true nature of poems in my opinion because it makes it all about the emotions and that's important. this poem illustrates this, it's wonderful!:)
9 years ago
Not only is this a poem about life, it is also inspirational. The importance of this message is so strong, yet, I think we all are a little guilty of forgetting to stop and smell the flowers at times. As a reader, it kept me drawn in from beginning to end and also kept my mind thinking about the message after. Beautifully written!