Comments : Blurred Reality

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    This gives me a bit of a mixed message; I feel sorry for the subject in this piece as they obviously have an extremely arduous life .. It sounds like it may be insomnia or kids (a.k.a insomnia).
    Yet right at the end, you slap me with a twist as the subject is at his/her best when in this state.

    Brilliant use of imagery in this piece, really burns the scenes into your head.
    My personal preference would have been to see a rhyme scheme implemented anywhere in this poem, (for me) it would have made a very good poem simply irresistable.

    When I saw this title on your page, I was led to the false presumption that this was going to be about different views on life. I'm so glad I was incorrect, the title is perfectly apt for this piece, as every word contained within are the subjects "Blurred Reality".

    Wonderful insight into this subjects life / mindset.

    Keep it up .. I'm sure you will.
    ~Pete.