Comments : Leandro (Prose; Part I)

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Hi Debs
    I was so happy to see you posting...i'm going to work my way through all the parts today....But the first one is awesome. Excellent imagery and word choices. Let me know what you get on this project. Sure looks like you put allot of time and creativity in these.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Elapsed

    My Goodness.. what a write!!!.. I am totally blown away!!

    "The love that gave life to his heart was uncontaminated by hideous pretenses, and he possessed the sweetest and most charming voice that I had ever heeded in this lifetime."

    so beautiful wording.. elegant we a powerful punch!!.. Simply breathtakingly Awesome!!..

  • 9 years ago

    by debbylyn

    First of all I love Rumi....so you have my attention....it sounds wonderful...can't wait to read more......your words flow with sheer beauty as usual....nicely written.....

  • 9 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Hi! I haven't read your stuff in way too long - I had to revisit some. I read part 3 of this little narrative first... and I have to say, I was a bit confused ; ). Your grasp of vocabulary is obviously very refined, especially for our generation, but I felt at first that it was still too... melodramatically verbose.

    That was, of course, until I realized that you were supposed to be writing like Poe : D. Makes a LOT more sense that way.

    I like how you opened up this piece - a very dense meditation on one particular object. I have the sense, too, that it's not just done wantonly - you always have purpose in your descriptions. Maybe I'll have to read the rest, and then leave another comment, eh?

    I hope school doesn't hold you for too long! I miss your poetry...