Comments : A Thought Goes Astray

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I love everything about this piece. You wrote it in a good way and expressed emotions greatly. I can relate to this in a way. Whole poem is original and interesting. You did excellent job with rhymes.
    My favorite stanza is:

    - Pure Intentions drive my actions,
    But self destruction is the result,
    I feel as if this life rejected me,
    And left me in a renegade faction.-
    ^^^
    Fantastic!

    The fact that you said so much in just three stanzas is impressing. I like your choice of words in the whole poem a lot.
    Powerful and unique piece from the first to the last line.

    Keep up the great work!
    5/5 from me