I like it...I'll have to look at another one of your creations...=)

I thought the story in this was amazing.
how in the beginning you thought it was more than what it was.
then you start anew, with something much more grand.
but in the end, you messed up.
technically, its not a great story because no one wants this to happen, but it IS w great write.
if you understand that.

my only thought is to add punctuation to it
like especailly periods (.) to show the end of a stanza, or line.
5/5

Very heart felt and emotional. The repitition was beautiful and fit in perfectly for the poem. The message was also easily identified but not spelled out for you. 5/5 <3

Wow,I can totally relate. 5.5. so is this a song too, cause if it's not parts should be. :)

There was so much pain in this poem! You got you feel across so well, and I think you are a wonderful poet!

Good work :)