Comments : Tears of a Ritalin Pill

  • 9 years ago

    by CuteThingsGoneWrong

    This poem kills my heart.
    When i was a child i was prescribed ritilan. Everyday i felt myself growing more numb, more of a zombie, dieing inside, wishing i could -feel- again. My words had no meaning and i could begin to see myself change into someone who just wanted to have an emotion that wasnt bought by the pleasentry of a pill.

    At the start the imagery you used, beautiful. Simple and beautiful, i imagine someone swalowing the darkness whole! someone innocent hoping that the pain will subside in due time.
    Your loneliness is created by the numbness of the pill, and even when you are loved all you can feel is hurt and sorrow no matter who is there. You could have the greatest person in the word whispering sweet nothings and all it twists in your head is the lies of a devil on your shoulder.
    I love the use of infection. Thats what it is, slowly plauging you! Ahh i love how you read my mind on some things :3
    Changing who you are slowly and silently and everything. Hmm and it is sad how we start to need these little white pils that do near nothing for us, buying medicted happiness

    THe last stanzas and lines are perfect <3 Or i think so

    I love this

  • 9 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    :-) this is why I wrote this poem.. I didnt want to let people know that I am currently taking ritalin... but it helps with my chronic fatigue- Due to low thyroid disease and so I decided to write about it... I am glad this piece touched you.. HUGS !