Comments : I Will Never Cry For You

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow, what a deep and powerful poem.

    I felt myself inside this poem actually, I could relate to so much of it right now. Especially when you repeat the fact the pretending everything is okay, is not actually okay anymore, it doesn't work the same as perhaps it used to.

    I like the mention of the mirror faces, again it shows the pretence that has been on show. It is funny how the heart always knows the truth though, no matter what the mirror/faces have on them.

    Your wording captures me, You add so much detail to the emotion with one word!
    The line that hit me was when you mentioned losing yourself bit by bit, I think this is something we can all relate to, and all get scared of, and I think it especially hurts more when we lose ourselves through losing someone/something else that once was a huge part of us.

    I think this poem also highlights the bravery of never letting yourself cry for this person/the loss. It is like your last bit of control over this situation, last bit of yourself that you refuse to let go of.

    I also think we kid ourselves sometimes, and try to convince ourselves that we don't need or want to cry over this person, because admitting any feelings towards them feels too painful.

    This idea of being shackled inside this love, and then the aftermath, which doesn't lead to freedom either, is very sad. Your poem has very sharp imagery as well as emotions that run deep.

    I really like this one from you!

    • 9 years ago

      by Kakera

      Totally spot on there! Too add to it, I think that the ending is overwhelmed with the irony of being so stuck that you start thinking that finally letting go is a sacrifice, even though you're aware of how meaningless and self-obsessed that is, because the bond is so one-sided that it has absolutely no effect on the other person whatsoever, and never will have.

      It's conflicting, I think. A war of the self between the reasonable and constructive start of a future, and the narcissistic delusions that cling to the past, hoping that the latter could recreate the entire thing for the future despite the fact that you're perfectly aware of how ironic it is to allow such a conflict when it means that the creation of a future is stopped by it . And yet, you can't stop.

      If you're lucky you'll find the resolve to break the circle cleanly, because the other way of letting go is emotional suicide. Or it is reinforced through putting on another mask, hiding the truth from others as well as yourself, thinking that if you pretend, it will be so in the future.

      (Note: ^ not my intended meaning as the writer, but my thoughts on it as a reader.)