Comments : Perdition

  • 9 years ago

    by GB

    The depth of writing made me read it again and again, it was more than fascinating each time. We have different views for life and destiny and your perspective here is more than interesting.

    Although there are few unnecessary "filling words" in some lines, still the poem flowing smoothly, and you know what grasped my attention, other than the creative imagery, it's the use of different tenses with emphasis on the passive tense, very well employed.

    I don't think you have to capitalize the beginning of the 4th stanza, just thought.

    Great read, thank you for sharing.

    • 9 years ago

      by Kakera

      I actually haven't thought about the passive tense part before. But now that I think about it, using a passive tense with emphasis for effect is definitely one of my quirks as a writer that is found in a lot of my writes.

      Actually, switching tenses is overall something I do unconsciously more often than I realize. It's rarely deliberate, but it's rarely a mistake that harms the continuity either.

      Anyways, thanks for reading and commenting!