Contest about your feelings/ # 1

Well I was running this in the club I'm in, lets see if anyone is interested :

"If I opened My Heart To you"

U can choose any title you think fits ^__^

Well you have to write an emotional poem..
can be sad or very sad..love..or friendship..or what
ever that you choose...but not funny ..
You have to make it emotional..
Consider your self talking to someone
who passed away..or you lost..or you badly miss..
or someone who have hurt you badly..

And If you opened your heart to them..
what would you say..
or how would you make them feel.

As I said this must be deep..pour
all your feelings ..

There will be 1st place and 2nd place

1st place -15 comments/ and I'll nominate the poem
2nd place- 10 comments
3rd place-5 comments

might add 3rd place if I found gd participation

and 2 comments for those who give it a go anyway.

Time opened for now!

So far I got
*Jane/done
*Temps/done
*Britt
*Confined/done
*Peace/done
*LilMissforsty
*Daniel
*Morgan/done
*kimberly/done
*Inside the liar
unless I get a notification that they are out

Ill have a go at it if ya don mind

Sure I dont lol...its wat Im looking for :P..take ur time

I would also like to try.

Me to :)

I may participate as well. Let me see what I can come up with.

Good :)

This sounds interesting i would love to have a go at it

How nice im gna..add and edit the prizes then lol

If I Opened My Heart to You.

I would dedicate
my heart to you -
as a gift of
dissection -

exploratory surgery,
per se.

- to expose
guilt asphyxiating
lingering thoughts -

for I was reluctant
to whisper goodbye -
upon that room
sedated by
death.

then I thought...

could this be -
an omen,
perhaps?

that departure
is futile -
for you will lie
motionless
beyond heaven's gates -
'til we meet again.

It is here that
I will bestow
my guilt for all to see,

yet until then...
this will stalk me -
lurking behind tinted shadows,
as if your footprints
are a carbon copy of mine -
tracing my every step,
in wonder of why I never
had the courage --
to say goodbye.

Temps, Thank you :).
Gd luck

And guyz plz dnt submit the poems b4 i give the results..or else how will I be able to nominate the wining poem!

I'm in! :)

XD

Sorry...don't worry about nominating my poem if I win, it's not a big deal.

If I opened my heart to you

I stand here reflecting my thoughts
thinking back to my first glimpse
of your eyes; an Egyptian goddess
roaming the halls of antiquity.
We first met under the influence
we danced all night; inseparable.

I woke, hoping it wasn't a dream,
relief, excited, nervous, love struck.
All the colors of the rainbow
shone on me that morning.
I texted you...you texted back,
a date was set and my heart wept.

Two weeks went by unnoticed,
together time had a curious way
of elapsing. One minute to look
at your beautiful body still
has a timeless stamp in memory.
Archived in the universal library.

It felt like we were in love,
together forever we said!
My blood never felt so alive
until pressed by your side.
The connection we had was real
but your insecurity was watered.

Tearing me apart is this:
For one month you cheated,
acting like you were fine,
leading me on like an idiot.
By accident I caught you,
not a sign of a tear or remorse.

You were an immature child
and I was your grown up toy.
You loved me like no other
yet another fucked you over.
Blame falls on both of you
and I label myself the fool.

The damage is irreversible,
delayed emotions wont save us.
My love is beginning to boil,
my body is burning with rage.
If only I could tell you to
your face, instead of my reflection.

If I Opened My Heart to You

Whispers of broken promises
To the tortured soul
I cant help but begin to imagine...

Dreams of your hands in mine
Yet its his your holding.
Our bodies entwined,
It goes without saying
These are but dreams
And I cant help but hope.

She stays close to home.
Dreaming of adventures,
Of knights in armour,
And golden days not yet passed.
She sleeps with an eye open,
Never wanting to miss a moment.

I cant tear my gaze away,
Whenever shes near,
Shes all I see.
I all but die under that gaze.
If only this was to be,
But what would come of it?

She is hope,
She is a dream,
She is.... my friend.

I am a fly upon the wall;
Forever at her mercy,
Longing for her touch,
Yet fearing the consquences.

If I opened My Heart To You

If I opened my heart up to you.
What do you think you would see?

I would see my little girl and what shes growing up to be.

Would you be able to handle it Old Man?
For my heart has been sincerely broken by you.
Not saying the things that should have been said,
And saying I love You To,
What about saying Im sorry,
Has that even entered your mind,
Because ive never heard you say it before,
Do you realize how unkind you’ve been?
And when you yell at me in anger,
Do you see that it makes me want to cry?
I don’t deserve the things you’ve said,
But I put on a brave face and lie.

However these words will never be said,
Even when your life is gone.
Because I don’t think you would hear me say them,
Because you are to withdrawn.

Just to hear you once say im sorry,
Would be the greatest gift you could ever give me.
So If I opened my heart up to you.
Why whatever would you do?

Niceeeeeee work XD keep it going

If I Opened My Heart To You

You have always been there for me
Through every bloody tear
You have always been there for me
And told me not to fear

But my heart has not been open to you
You do not know that I laugh so I do not cry
You don't know how black my heart has gone
Me, myself, and heart are bound to die

If I opened my heart to you
And told you me secrets in dispare
If I left my heart wide open
Would you turn your head, or would you care

Which is why my heart is forever enraptured
Within the bounds of my bone
I lay my broken heart down
On that black pillow that is my sole

You have always been there for me
Through every bloody tear
Will you still be there
When I tell you what i really fear

If I Opened My Heart To You ~ Kimberley B.

I suppose you can say I lied, when I said I didn't care.
I guess when I wrote you off, that I wasn't being fair.
Well I was in over my head and taking it out on you,
I was losing something precious, I guess you were too.
I suppose you can blame me for my own unhappiness.
I guess that in the end I brought upon myself this mess.
Well I'm not sorry for the way I acted; just a little bit;
Okay, fine, maybe I'm sitting here regretting all of it,
But that doesn't mean that you'll ever get an apology.
At least not until the bitterness has nearly killed me.

I'm not sorry for the way I acted, that's just how I am.
I grew up learning how to properly not give a damn.
I'm just sorry that you loved me and I deceived you.
I never thought that you would think I loved you too.
I suppose that you could say that I over-analyzed it all.
You always said my critical thinking would be my fall.
I put words into places that they should never ever be,
And made something out of nothing, condemning me.
I broke your heart the hardest, never second guessed,
I just let you down so easily, but you know that best.

Now I can't help but wonder if I did something wrong.
Was I lying to myself and I just dragged you along?
I said I didn't love you, a heart like mine just can't feel,
But now I'm wondering if those words were ever real.
One day you gave up on me, and I understand why.
Now all I can ever think about is how I let you slip by.
All I had to do was look inside, at the feelings I ignore,
And I could have stopped you from walking out my door.
It kills me inside, now I know better but you're through.
I could have saved us, only if I opened my heart to you.

This was a fantastic contest and honestly I had a really good time writing it. :P It's pushed me into writing more personal things again, for the time being. :D

Oh man am soo GLad :D..gna check whos left

Okay! got 5..not bad. And been too long..so I will close this in two days.

Unless I get a pm that the ones who I have pmed are OUT. Then it's closed already.

Gd lucl

If I opened my heart to you,
I would say, sweet angel,
I'm afraid too.

I would greet your fear
with a knowing smile,
and a tear lingering
for your eyes
alone.

I would let the walls of
my great courage
come crashing down
so you might see the
trembling soul that's
inside of
me.

If I opened my heart to you,
I would stop my white lies
dead in their tracks.

I would grant you a
wistful goodbye,
but not before
your hand found a home
in mine
a final time.

If I opened my heart to you.

CLOSED-----

Comments : Not the final results

judge number one :

I was impressed by the overall participation from all these poets and their willingness to write these poems. Well, lets begin.

If I opened my heart to you (Silvershoes)
1st place

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I found this poem to be exactly what the contest was asking for. The way the writer explains how they would react and deal with their emotions being spilled out. Also the way they wrote this poem was creative as it gave a different format than what most that are written.

If I Opened My Heart to You. (Dreamer)
2nd place
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This poem really gave another view of how this contest could have been done and I was impressed by their excellent word choice and great imagery throughout the poem. Also the flow of the poem was helpful as it let me ease through the poem and absorb everything the writer wanted me to understand.

If I Opened My Heart to You (Confine)
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This poem got my attention as it is something that most everyone can relate to. The way ,though, the poem is going is almost predictable near the end. Not to say that it wasn't good as it was but it was almost like a cliche

If I Opened My Heart To You (Kimberely)
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The thoughts in this poem were good and the way it is said really portray one actually opening up their heart and just venting. Some things were unnecessary though in this poem, which in the end threw off the flow and the rhyme scheme I thought was forced at times.

If I Opened My Heart To You (Morgen)

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I was pulled into this poem by the first stanza and then I lost interest as the writer makes the other stanzas weak though I have to say the last stanza was a good rap up. Anyway the rhyming was forced in areas and also the flow got blown off by it.

I f I o p e n e d M y H e a r t T o Y o u (Peace and Dinos)

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To be quite frank I didn't like the idea this poem was trying to portray though it is a good one and quite creative. Also the ideas in the poem seemed scattered.

If I opened my heart to you (Soft Parade)

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This poem was very descriptive in it's ideas but the overall story way of telling this poem is a bit over board in my eyes. I liked the basics of the poem but it wasn't really getting into the contest, I don't think. Could just be the way I interpreted it.

Very cool and thank you :)

Congrats =)
and thnx

Results :

1st place : Jane
2nd place : Temps
3rd: Morgan.

You all did amazing jobs. the only thing that was playing between one and another. Was how much you guyz payed attention to your grammar and spelling mistakes. Some poems started by really deep wording yet ended up distracting the emotional expressions which I said should be the ones most focused over.
Anyway each one of you will get his poems commented over by details.

Jane your poem will be nominated for the weekly contest by me and the other 2 judges which you will find out who they are by the votes you will get. Good luck for the W.contest.

Temps and Morgan congrats..And thank you for the participation !

Everybody thnxs a lot for giving it a go, I hope you try again in the next one.

<<<<<<<<<<<SUBMIT your work now

Thank you so much :)
If it's ok, I would like you to nominate Temps' poem instead. I have no chance of winning the weekly because my poem is on the front page right now and authors can only win once every month or so.
She deserves it!

Problem is, its not nominate-able :S She submitted it from a long while :/

Oooh... hm :\

In that case, I'll submit mine and don't worry about nominating it!
Do whatever you think's best.

No worries, I think all the entries been worth it.
Since its a contest about our feelings, all are deep enough. So instead I will double the comments that you where supposed to get to from 15 to 30.
then 10/20
-5/10

I think fair enough for all XD

MORE than fair enough! That's a huge amount of comments, wow.

Thanks so much, Nana.

And congrats to everyone.

Congrats Jane, Morgan & all the other entries. Thanks Nana, how nice of you...thanks for holding such a great contest.

:) I'm glad you guyz are satisfied XD.
You are most welcome, and THANK U so much for the participation. Appreciated, and was enjoyable .