At some points the rythem is off but over all i loved the message and the choice of word-placement, keep it up!
xoxo
~waiting~

p.s. thax 4 the comment, means a lot :]

I like this one. Like alot. Its really great.
Keep up the good work man.

Perfect poem that i want to read over and over.
great job stranger.....

"... know that your mine" ---> you're mine.
The rhythm is just... off. Idk. It just doesn't quite work unless I force it, and as the reader, I shouldn't have to. :P Let me know if you fix it up a little. I love the idea.
KH