Aww thats really good, the flow is very good for it xxxxxxx

It has good material in it, but I sorta disagree with Pink Princess ^^^ I wouldn't say that the flow was great. It wasn't horrible but it was a bit off at some points. Your wording was great, and the title is eye-catching ;)

Ally. x

Amazing!
I could feel the emotions coarsing through the words, it all seemed so real, so relatable. You painted a sad and lonely picture with your words, and portrayed the emotions nicely.

5/5
--Elly.