I liked it but it could use some work

Omg, I almost cried. The Emotion I felt was Strong. Honestly. The only work i think it needs is the editing of those boxes and giberish things...I get them alot...xD But once thats fixed, I Should be fine.

Keep Writing. 5/5

-Ally

This was an amazing poem. So emotional and powerful. It was amazing.

This was such a sad poem. But very well written. I love the imagery. I think using that made this poem more like a poem. Clever idea. I also like the use of periodic syntax too. Keep it up hun. Nik