That was so beautiful
i loved all the metaphors you used
absolutely brilliant
wow

5/5 for sure

kelsey xx

Excellent!! =]
This poem is very well written
Great job
^^

Pshh.

dont throw in useless fillers like sweetheart. a but here and there is good, but sweetheart usually ends up throwing off the poem unless there is an absolute dripping of sarcasm.

learn from the sarcasm mastaaa.

Hmm, its more like a story than a poem, but it is written greatly, you have done a great job and you deserve a 5/5 from me

Mmmhmmm.. I'm lovin' it.
I agree with Goran, it's much more like a story than a poem. But don't get me wrong, it was amazingly written. Every other sentence you had sarcasm bouncing off each word. The title was wisely chosen and unique - it's probably what pleased me the most when I read this poem. :) The flow was smooth and the emotions were intense. Beautiful job. :]] Overall: 5.5

"You've built yourself a sugar coated house of candy without even trying
And you wonder how you get yourself stuck in these sticky situations,"
- I adore these first two lines. They were a great opener and they certainly provoked my mind a little bit. (: Nicely done.

- Steph. xx