Bill,
I love your poems. You have the sensational ability to write a beautiful love poem. In my opinion very few can carry out one without sounding cliche. I love the effect of the poem on the reader, leaving the longing feeling for such passionate love. Wanted to be loved as you love another. Beautiful and breathtaking.

This is so beautiful, and the girl you wrote this for is very lucky to have you around. :)
I loved the repetition of the last 3 lines of each stanza. :)
The last line just captures it all. You did an amazing job. 5/5

Bri~