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Hey i like the concept of your poem, The only thing i could say to help you is to change the flow. It was a little choppy. Utilize your puncuation marks when needed, and also spell out the words. Instead of u, say you.
Other than that it was good!:]
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Um well in a poem you should not use "U" for the word "you". Also, this is not written like a poem. It doesn't have to ryme, but triple check the flow. One out of five.