A really effective use of repetition, especially loved the ending:

"to let me back in ,
back in to your world"

so sad. As much as I enjoyed this poem, there was something about it when I was reading it that didn't seem quite right and I couldn't put my finger on it until the 3rd time I read it. I think it's the punctuation. You've only used commas, maybe try using a full stop or semi-colon? It might just be me and the way that I read though haha. Overall a fantastic job =) 5/5

Em xXx

A very sad, but beautiful write.
you put such passion into this piece.
and the emotions were deep.
5/5.

This was one of your better pieces. I think this poem had more emotion then the last piece I read. I think this poem as far as structure wass pretty good definitly better then the last one. So I'm going to give this poem a 5/5
kaila

This is a great poem, it has emotion in it, and a great poem needs that, for the most part i loved it. 5\5

This poem could easily be trasformed into a song. It just flowed so beautifully and the reptition sounded like lyrics which was cool. I even added my own beat in my mind which made the poem come to life. Well done *5/5*

I agree, this poem has alot of emotion in it, i really anjoyed reading it, it's very sad, hope things work out

Love this 5/5