Short sweet simple. 5/5.

Short sweet simple. 5/5.

I loved how this was different and really interesting to read. The emotion behind it was clear and real easy for me to relate with. It was short sweet and to the point yet it was filled with power and meaning. Well done. *5/5*

This is really simple, sweet and effective. I like the use of onomatopoeia "thump-thump" and the other repeated sounds, they work really well. The ending's really sweet, 5/5

Em xXx

ANOTHER SWEET SHORT POEM, BUT YOU SEEM TO EXPRESS THE WAY YOU FEEL..GREAT WRITE!!...4/5