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  • 16 years ago

    by Jaime

    That was a very good poem. I have to suggest adding punctuation and the usual things like that.

    At first, I was a little unsure about your use of the word 'correspond' because it wouldn't typically be used the way you did. But I decided I love it, because in a way you need both definitions of the word.

    Other than the punctuation, I think this poem is golden, and I wish you luck with it.