Nice flow and ur poem reminds me of a book i read once too and i liked the book so kudos

This is greatt!

The cycle continues to repeat,
And you're lost inside a lie,
He's only there when you're in heat,
Any other time it's "Goodbye",

i love that stanza.. the flow.. the rhyme and just the whole poem in general.. excellent job!... it really grabbed my attention from the first line and kept me wanting to read more. Great job! =)

Amazing poem... i loved it... the flow was perfect and not forced..and the rhyming was really good... i zipped right through it and didnt have to pause once... which is really good...

and your ending was a "BAM" kinda ending you know? lol

loved it. definately deserves a 5/5

Love the moral behind this one, the flow was sometimes a little off but otherwise it was great. The rhyme was awesome and I loved the sense of frustration that I got from it. My favourite line was:

"And you're lost inside a lie,"

Fabby =)

5/5

Em xXx