Maybe some suggestions of what you might do next e.g.
"Put it behind us and forget our past?
Or accept the fact that we'd never last?"

I know they're both terrible lines but you get the idea haha. Then perhaps describe more about why you want to be with this person. I like your idea of ending with a question. Perhaps asking them if they'll give you another chance?

Just some ideas, message me when you've finished it and THEN I'll rate =)

Em xXx

Perfect =) Glad I could help wooo! Haha. Love the rhyming and the flow.

"Every time we touch an electric shock goes through me."

Great line,

Em xXx

Awww... amazing poem..

Its good. it has flow to it =]

Fabulous. I think most people can relate to it which makes it that much better.

Fabulous. I think most people can relate to it which makes it that much better.

This one tight
nice rhyme and flow..=)