Debbie
Such a sad heartbreaking piece. This brought tears to my eyes as I read your words.

Once I held forever
Held it tight within my grasp
Too bad I didn't realize
Forever seldom lasts

This stanza really wraps things up. When ever I read your writing it always touches me in some way. You have amazing talent.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

A beautiful piece the whole way through. it was so good! I loved it. The conclusion, though often stated, was said so well. Your flow and rhyme were really good!
*ME*

Be still my heart the beating
Lest tears in torrents fall
Once I held forever
Then somehow lost it all

Sweet Debbie,

Your poems make me sigh. I know all about the losing game, unfortunately and you have portrayed it very well. When I see you sweet smiling face in our clubphoto album I cannot imagine it is you yourself you are writing about....

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid