Wow. This is very well written.
You're such a wonderful poet.
I loved it!
Keep writing. You have loads of talent!
5/5

-Ally

Wow...
This is amazing... Remarkable piece, filled with deeply touching sadness.

- Dreams of waking and suffering once again.-
- Demon and monster the living chant.-
- His story ignored but hated within your eyes.-
^^^
Mind- blowing lines, so powerful and outstanding.

Fantastic poem, truly greatly written, filled with dark atmosphere.
Keep up!

Wow... I could litterly sense and feel the darkness, gloom, and sorrow. I must say that I was drawn in to this piece and my emotions were held captive by the picture that you painted.

I cannot even begin to express all the different ways a reader could see this, but that is what makes this piece so great.

To be honest, I could not even offer any advice on this... I was so consumed that any critiquing flew right out the window.

Well done.... very powerful!

~~Sher

That was very well put
awesome job
take care

"Forgotten but not yet gone."

Somehow these lines are rather sad.........to choose to forget while still existing........infact the whole poem is saddening ......am picturing a man deprived of the fuel to nudge a man further: happiness! Loved the poem through it all.