A unique way to write, very good just needs to flow more. Unless you meant for it to be writen this way then its fine. I'm use to a ryhme more than a collaboration. But I can't wait to read more from you , keep in touch and let me know when you write anymore and I'll be sure to check them out. :) 5/5

Thanks for the advice JEFF
=)

I really hope this isn't true! If it is, I am sorry. This is incredibly sad regardless.

"This is my entire marriage is my father's fault"
it should be
"This entire marriage is my father's fault"

you had some unneeded words in there.

Great, but sad write!
5/5

This is very good.

Very interesting, all your work is mind you. i would love to know where you get your inspiration from because its coming from a very unique place.

A very unique writer. Obviously it's not al lof us that have to go through this some of us can choice who we marry ourselves. 5/5, Em