Yeah some of it seem like you were trying a little to hard. try to seperate it more like,
one sentense
one ryhme
one sentense
one ryhme

it doesn't come accros as if your trying to hard that way.
but if the sentenses are long then you have to push for every line more then but let it flow and feel what your writing and people will enjoy it more. but great poem good thought. 5/5

That poem is good. it shows how u truly feel, and lets people know whats goin on. keep on writing
TiNkErBeLl

This is good. very sad.

I love this. It shows that people that go through violence usually come out stronger, not that this excuses it. 5/5, Em