I like the use of craft, it's really good i liked it alot. it made u like anticipate what was going to happen (foreshadowing) it was really good almost like u wanted to save them in a way.....

Intriguing.
A fantastic write, you really have improved hun. This piece was a brilliant. I really liked the repetition of the clock, it added to the peice and made the anticipation stronger.

Your talented,
5/5
--Paula

Brilliant poem.

i loved it. it can relate to that for sure.
thanks for commenting on poem "she can't take it anymore"

i really appreciate that.

anyways, keep writing. this was fantastic.

i am here as well if you need to talk.

<3liv