I like how each line is short, it makes it more powerful. Nice job =)

Natalie
I love the way you are letting go of your hurt in this piece.

Tears you bring
Erase this love
Right here, right now
You are nothing
But a memory now

These lines say so much. I enjoyed reading this.
Good job!
Take Care Cindy

You aren't a man
Just a mere little child
Childish little boy

very powerful i love it