It was good, though sticking mud in your ears? No offence meant of course, it was a good poem and caught and kept my attention.

Powerful from the beginning to the end.
I like the flow that you created, it is truly interesting along with great rhythm of the whole piece. The atmosphere in each stanza is filled with emotions.
I agree with Britt- many people can relate to this piece which makes it really good.
I think that you did good job with punctuation, too.
My favorite stanza is:

- Just cover your sheltered eyes
And plug your ears with mud
Ignore my melody of cries
Walk by my puddle of blood-
^^
Very vivid.

Keep up :)

The flow and rhymes were PERFECT. Great job. xx

I loved this poem! I just wanted to keep reading more to tell you the truth. lol it makes me want to write. but i dont have time to at the moment. =[
but anyways. I really liked it. the flow and everything was perfect. I dont see how you think this is rusty b/c its not.
I like how its like your talking to someone yet telling them like a story.
Its really good.
=]

It was interesting. Even though, to me, it sounds unfinished. I just think there could be much more to it.
I get the idea of faking, and I did like the ending. Everyone's assumption that {this girl} was always happy.
I just think that there could be more to the story, to really make it POP.
Like I got the feeling while reading, the suspense built up towards then end, but not enough for the ending to really, ya know, go out with a BANG.
But the concept of the poem was really a good idea.
=)
5/5

Rusty? I thought it was great. Awesome emotions put into it. Nice rhyming and flow. Can't see any faults! Keep it up!

Chh! kinda rusty? You lie! lol! this was a great poem! okay.. so it wasn't great.. it was freaking awesome! lol, you did a wonderful job on this *excuse me.. you did a freaking amazing job on this* and the lines flowed wonderfully! as always i have just one thing that i would add if i were you

Walk *on* by my puddle of blood

i think that it flows a little better, but that is just me! again, wonderful job! keep it up hun! :] i know how you feel, i really do

...
I don't really know what to say, even though this poem was sort of short and I thought the flow was the teensiest bit choppy, it was as if the poem was talking about me. I'm just speechless. The poem was beautiful. 5/5
~gabriella

I loved this one. I don't even know what to say about it, it's just wonderful. Amazing job hun.

AHA! I love the first stanza.
At first, I was like, "nice first two lines.. oh, crap! the third line is terrible!" (sorry, being honest...) but then I read on and was like . . . Hey, that makes sense. AND it's stated well.
So all in all, I love the first stanza.

As for the second stanza, it's a little weak compared to the first stanza. Remember: the first stanza creates the level at which the poem resides. By that I mean, if it's great, the rest of the stanzas have to be amazing, just like it. See what I mean?
The second stanza lacked originality, had cliche rhymes, and not much emotion. I really disliked the rhyming in it.

Now, in the third stanza, you are stronger than the second, but still under the first. I did like the second line of it; "no, don't try! you can't!" when the first line was "you can't see what I shield". It just has a lot of .. emotional value to it. Not too bad.

THe fourth stanza: though very different from the rest (it's got a sarcastic tone this time), I did like it. Since it's different, it's not as harshly judge to the first one.. It's a good stanza. And I like the beginning line ("I'm just another drama queen ... I don't need you hunny) ... good lines.

The fifth stanza, though flowing well and okay rhymes, had a cliche meaning/saying. Using eyeliner in poems is over rated.. And, in my opinion, takes away the readers... uh, how do I say this? ... value, maybe?
I mean, it depersonalizes (if that's even a word!) it from the reader because you're taking an object that not everyone uses.. get my meaning? Whew, that was hard to explain.

Now, as for the last stanza. Remember my rant from another comment where I said the beginning, middle, and end are all imporant? Though your middle was weak, in my opinion, both your beginning and ending were eye-grabbers. I really enjoyed reading them both, and they hold my favorite parts of the poem.

Overall, you did a good job. Sure, it was weak, but you hadn't written in awhile, and I know how that is..

Not to mention the "you can't see what I shield"... I realize how personal that may be to you.. and others may not see that.
Anyways.
Good job. Keep strong.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5