Comments : The eyes, confined

  • 12 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Wow...flawless beauty! I am going to vote for this one!
    Very beautiful poem by you, Sluv is right..you are very talented indeed...

    Take care,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 12 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Love the flow and rhyming of this one....what I really love about your poetry....it begs to be read aloud!

    "How content they would surrender,
    where the daylight wars with night,
    on a vast enflamed horizon,
    to the rich and fiery light."

    ^ Beautiful metaphor......brilliant insertions: "daylight wars with night", and "enflamed horizon"

    Enjoyed this one very much! Take care, Debbie

  • 12 years ago

    by Elapsed

    Wow.. this was a fantastic read!!..

    "How the faintest glimpse of sunlight,
    makes their hopes ascend anew,
    given nothing but the presence,
    of a shadow in my view."

    Really enjoyed this stanza, the sorrow and pain was felt so intensely within these few lines.. An amazing write altogether!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Cindy

    EOB
    What a excellent piece you have penned. The imagery and word choices are awesome. The flow great.

    "How the faintest glimpse of sunlight,
    makes their hopes ascend anew,
    given nothing but the presence,
    of a shadow in my view."

    The emotions captured in your words really reach out and touch the readers heart.
    ~Bravo~
    Take Care Cindy

  • 12 years ago

    by Sarah

    This poem is amazing. It's very well written with a great use of words...I love it, keep it up 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Powerful and beautifully penned. The imagery is excellent and the flow is impeccable!

    ^How content they would surrender,
    where the daylight wars with night,
    on a vast enflamed horizon,
    to the rich and fiery light.^

    Great word choice and no forced rhyming.
    ~~~BRAVO~~~

  • 12 years ago

    by Eliza

    Its very good, although i dont understand completly the subject.

    your very well versed.

    keep up the good work =]

  • 12 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    That was written very professionaly.