Comments : Raven's Lullaby

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Debbie,

    EAP has forgiven you, trust me!
    Lovely poem by you, although I love the River poem best!

    Hugs,

    Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    You rose to this challenge so well. This is an amazing piece. I love your interpretation. The great agony Poe must have felt losing his love.

    Dark one! Evil incarnate! Recant thee, Liar! Reprobate!
    An angel is my sweet Lenore, again his answer "Nevermore"
    Oh Death! thy scabbard find a mark, on final journey I embark
    Love bleeds upon this gilded brand, I pray thee angel take my hand
    He chortles! "Nevermore" with glee, Not even death can set me free
    Into emptiness go I, lulled by Raven's lullaby

    This stanza was a wonderful end to a awesome poem.
    ~Clapping~
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I have to admit that I'm completely impressed with this piece. I love your writing style and truly enjoy in your amazing poetry and this outstanding piece is definitely not an exception. So powerful, truly remarkable. I like the flow, every line flows excellently and you did superb job with rhymes.

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    Eventide by candle dwells, shadow visions born in Hell
    Into madness soul's descent, wrung from sorrow purged lament
    Parchment volumes rift with lore, heart bleeds for my lost Lenore
    Sways of pendulum, ticking clock, beats of lonely sounds- tick-tock-
    ^^^

    I love these lines. So vivid, deeply captivating.

    Keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Bravo. Claps* I like how you put the pendulum in the beginning as well. I know you were referring to time passing but it made me happy you used that word instead of another since he also wrote The Pendulum and the Pit. This poem gets a five for sure. Would you read a bit of my work? If you don't want to it's okay. I don't want to force someone to do something they do not wish to do. If you do read any of it, at least read my latest then you may read whatever you like if you choose to read more. I will have to check out your other work. This one was lovely.