Good poem i like dark poems but this one really told a story one suggestion though dont try to hard to rhyme a couple of your rhymes like the first couplet of the first stanza sound almost off and kind of forced

I thought this was really gorgeous actually. The flow of the poem was quite smooth, though the rhyming seemed forced in some places.

Hiding from the knife that continues to sever.

^I have to say that was one of the parts of the poem that really got me the most. It's a quite descriptive yet intriguing sentence.

5/5 [very good job btw!]
~gabriella

This poem would make a good heavy metal song.
I like the words that you used, and the flow of the poem.
i loved it, very dark, yet to me weirdly touching

great work

sarah

At the beginning of the poem, it was like a bunch of people were ganging up on the person, and stabbing him to death. The death seemed so real. It was like I was really there. You did a great job with going into detail about the way he was killed. You did a amazing job with making the poem seem dark and scary. The flow was good, not as good as it could have been, but still good. I give this poem a 4/5.

.:Britni:.

Detail 9/10
vocabulary 9/10
imagery 10/10

i really liked this poem, it made you feel like you were seeing the event first hand and feeling the feelings :) good job