Comments : Whats Wrong With Me?

  • 16 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    I really liked the poem. i think i know the feeling very well now.
    The flow was just okay.
    i enjoyed the last stanza the most. I find myself asking that question alot.
    good work

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Another sad poem, full of emotion and wonder.
    Again, two suggestions.
    I think again, you should add punctiation, periods, and question marks. You have many questions in this poem, and adding question marks, to me, would add more to the reading, to the emotion in it.
    Also, for this stanza:

    "I wish you would leave
    I'm dieing inside
    But yet your still here, tormenting me"

    It should be "dying". Just thought you should know that.
    I still give it a 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Another great piece. :] The beginning really drew in my attention. :] And The poem itself, as a whole, was just. .amazing. It was well written and well thought out. Again, the emotions were intense. another great write. and another 5/5! :]