A touching gesture, i am moved...

Your choice of words are great, i think you need to arrange the layout of the poem better maybe in verses, just seperated a bit.
Very sad, and im sorry for your loss. keep up the heartfelt emotions.

I enjoyed this one great choice of words very touching. Sorry for your loss. the only problems I see here is the format and to many commas.

This was a very nice poem and im srry about ur dad. I lost my mom when i was 6 so i could relate to your feelings :) keep it up