Comments : Open Your Eyes; Let Love Seep Through

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    I really love this poem! I love your style of writing! It is mature and unique..

    Shattered is the widow, lying awake with such fright.
    And, wasted is the man, when alcohol's seems so right.

    ^^ these lines just go perfectly.. the flow is great and it really paints a picture in my mind... very nice imagery here

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    Open your eyes; let love seep through -
    there's more than the earth revolving for you.
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    ^^^ those lines are brilliant! Especially the 2nd one.. that is very nicely written.. you have excellent word choice! People think the world revolves around them but there ismuch more to that..

    Dreams of my fantasies, awaken me at night -
    I'm holding on too tightly, struggling with all my might.
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    ^^ not my favorite set of lines but still fit in well with this poem.

    It settles in your heart, like a potion in the wind,
    so easily brought on and such an astounding best friend.
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    ^^ beautiful lines once again.. I don't even know what to say.. you just have a really great and unique way of describing certain feelings..

    I just need to . .
    Open my eyes; let love seep through.

    Beautiful! from beginning to end.. you do an amazing job of letting the reader feel your emotions and you set such a positive mood with your words and the sense of hope you present in the poem.

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. Very mature and very real. Excellent job! =) 5/5