Comments : Nothing left to do

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Although not my genre of choice, I do love your free verse poems. This piece delivered a very meaningful message and you have an awesome word choice. I love the way it ended, though I would shorten the last line a bit for the sake of flow:

    Giving all then giving in leaves nothing left to do.

    I might say
    Giving all leaves nothing left to give
    or
    When all is given what is left to offer?

    Just some suggestions. Overall the poem was great!

  • 16 years ago

    by Abha

    Unity dances amid acceptance and regret
    This theme developed through despondent accord

    sensitive expression....