Wow, there was a lot of emotion in this poem. And, I loved it. I'm sure many, many people can relate to this because it's something that happens quite frequently(sp) to people. Not so much the waiting for forever, but wanting someone in their life badly, you know?

There were a few things I thought could use fixing:

"Because I knew you were the one for me. " << Maybe try that without the "because" It just sounded better to me, and it kind of flowed a lot better too.

"Forever seemed to grow farther and farther away."

^^ With this one it might be better with one farther instead of it written two times.

Lastly:

"But I learned you never get what you're expecting."

^^ WIth this, I don't really like how you have "but" in there, it's kind of an ugly word. I use it a lot, and many people do. It's just sometimes it doesn't fit well at all, and this is one of the cases.

Other than those few things you did a wonderful job with this poem, and it has so m uch emotion. (:

Keep it up, dear.

Aww, thats good keep it up x

Ooo...i really like the cliche part..great work! You are absolutly write forever is wayyyy too long to wait i can totally connect!

Aww this was really sad. I can totally relate 100%. It's so hard to be in love when someone isn't sure isn't it? Well with this poem I thought you did an amazing job at describing your feelings 5/5 for usre

Great work. Keep it up.

I like this a lot. You didn't follow the standard stanza-rhyme scheme and it worked out very well for you.

There's a sad truth in this as well. It's good that you're able to acknowledge it, despite the pain it might have caused.

My favorite stanza is:

"As the years trotted by, and life lived on.
Forever seemed to grow farther and farther away.
I don't know why, but I wouldn't give up hope.
I refused to let it grow astray.

I use to hope for something so cliche.
Like a movie with a happy ending.
Maybe he would fall in love with me.
But I learned you never get what you're expecting. "

well yeah it's two stanzas. But the two go so well together. Especially the part about living for something so cliche...it works so well. Great job on this. Definite 5/5.

Very realistic and has a lot of emotion. i loved how you used the words and attracted the attention of the audiance and kept it well.
great job.
5/5

So sweet and full of feelings,beautiful words, great work , keep write,5/5
and i write about love too have a look

Thats good,.i like the way you write it,^_^.5/5

Ah I know this feeling all too well :(

great poem.

I like this poem. It's simple, no complicated phrases but has a lot of meaning. My favourite line: 'Cause forever... is just too long await'.

Very good
keep up the good work!

I love this poem it just flows the whole way!