I'm sorry Becky, for everything I've ever done
I regret all that I've done times a million
`Hm, I don't like how you use "done" again. It kind of took away from the lines emotions.

I know I'm a f**k-up and bad boyfriend
I know that I'm sorry and I will be to the end
`I think "to" makes it slightly awkward--different word, maybe? I cringed at the choice of rhyme at first, but then I re-read it, and I like it. It works.

I had it all and threw it away, I was so stupid
I ruined what was perfect, and I pissed off cupid
`That made me crack a smile. I love the use of rhyme. It's so simple; rarely used; but just brilliant in your piece.

I can't believe I messed things up as badly as this
I can't believe that I may never again feel your kiss
`For some reason, that choice of rhyme is just too cliche and bugs me.

this relationship I would never exchange it
`That also sounds kind of awkward to me.

You were the best I could ask for, that and so much more
but as I write this I want to cry die and curl up on the floor
`Aw, momentum just died. The second line is really clumsy, and I feel like you could've put it in other words.

You used a LOT of the same words over and over again throughout the poem, and it really took away from the strengtho f the words. I loved the fact that the vocabulary was simple, but effective though. At times, the flow broke and it took a while to get back on its feet, but I did enjoy it. Just read over it, and edit it a bit and I know this'll be a piece worth the read.

**I do hope things get better for you, btw.

--..MiNDYY