Where do i begian?

i liked it but i think it would sound a little better like this-Razorblades, I feel so thin
Cutting slowly through my skin

I feel the pain, I feel insane
It feels so good, what do I gain

It hurts so much, and its my crutch
What will I say, I love the touch

Razorblades
These sharp charades
Blackened days
Bloody evades
Through razorblades