Touch to a skin from a heart to a heart is really.. beautiful..

Digging my FINGERS into your back...
hey you might wanna fix that line. but i love the poem... and i love all of your work...

This poem was absolutely beautiful,
i dont blieve i saw any mistakes. poem was written good, showed a good image, and ect. it is mos def a 5/5.

~bleeding love~

I really liked the first lines. It helped set the scene for a good poem. In the second stanza, “back of you truck” should be “back of your truck”.

UGGGGGHHHHHH. You HAD to kill it with country music, didn’t you? Just kidding.

I noticed a lot of “YOU did this” and “YOU did that” phrases in your writing. You may want to try and reword some of these to use less of the word YOU. Maybe just use RUBBING MY ARMS WITH YOUR STRONG HANDS instead of YOUR RUB MY ARMS. Of LAYING ME DOWN AND LOOKING AT ME ADORINGLY instead of YOU LAY ME DOWN. Just my opinion again.

I like the WET AND READY line. Its pretty blunt, but not offensive; just what this type of poem needs.

“As you push in deeper and deeper with every thrust”. Good imagery here again, found myself really imaging this going on in my mind.

“We move together as one; bodies becoming one.”. Im not sure I like the repeating of ONE. It kind of broke up the thought.

The ending was good as well, really romantic.

Overall, another great poem. The subject was explained tastefully and was not offensive.

5/5