Last line:
you and i collide
just a suggestion babe

other than that it was amazing : ) 5/5 <33

Very nice. subtle details make the poem more exciting.

Nicce poem and it ios nice to see you writting again =] thanks for listening boo... read some of my work also kkk..=] 5/5

Oh wow....really...i love it....it's just amazing. i agree with me just you....you and i collide..hmm....anyway!

When it rains invisible fingers trace every inch of me.

^ i really like this line....wonderful. great job babe.

I love that, when you and I collide... It's an interesting way of interpreting love. Thankyou for your comment.

Greta x

I love that last line it hits you like a slap in the face!

keep writing

I really really really really really like this poem, I love how you describe your emotions as if they were a storm...this is definitly one of my favorites. I love it. lol

I really really really really really like this poem, I love how you describe your emotions as if they were a storm...this is definitly one of my favorites. I love it. lol

Great poem!
but try using more decriptive words...
keep up the good work

I love this poem, great job, is one of a kind, and thanks for the comment.

Good poem!

Hey
this is realy good
great job hunn
5/5

Hey nice poem...

I love the metaphors in this poem!
well done! =]

Amazing. Brilliant. Captivating. . . This piece is definitely going into my favourites.

AMAZING JOB!